Told by the governor
That we were in no danger
From the Japanese's rife
Yearning to be our executer
The undefeatable fortress was a joke
Bomb to pieces left with smoke
Thought to cross the jungle was impossible
But proved them to be assessible
Where on earth did they go
Leaving us in this dreaded camp
That no one seem to live again
It is good to see that your using poetic devices such as ryhme "Joke" "Smoke", "impossible" "assessible", you have created a quiet and cautious atmosphere of the ending, and I assume that this is the WWII when the Japanese Invaded Singapore when I saw the word "Japanese". Good work!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Ryan. I think that this poem was very interesting, and you have done a great job in telling the story of Singapore. It is very interesting in the way you used the "governor" to say that Singapore was safe, but yet saying the same "governor" had abandoned Singapore. This actually shows us how useless the governor was. Also, it was good that you used many ironies in the poem, such as the "undefeatable fortress" was "bombed to pieces left with smoke". These two parts of your poem really captured my attention as you did a very good job by showing how a fortress fell and lost so badly. In conclusion, I feel that you have done a great job in conveying the feelings and happenings of the fall of Singapore.
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