“We will have to pack and leave soon! “said my mother. As my father was sent to Taiwan to work, our whole family had to follow as well. The whole house was in a mess as we packed all the clothing and covered all the furniture with cloths. Back then, I was just seven was extremely excited about the trip to Taiwan. Very soon, we were all done packing and were ready to leave.
We arrived at the airport real soon, and also, boarded the plane. When we arrived in Taiwan, everything seemed so fresh to us. First, we went to our new home and put down our luggage. Then we went to the night market, shopping malls around our new home to familiarize with our surroundings. Everything sold there, especially the food were different to that of Singapore’s . One thing did not change, that is, the price.
On the second day, we began our usual life, including all the house chores that we normally do. It was not too hard for me to adapt as usually, all my matters are taken care of. However, I do notice that my Mother was especially finding all the house chores hard to adapt. Not only the rooms were situated at different places, the water taps were also different to that of Singapore’s! However, what I had realized is that there were now more trash at home. I was told to separate my rubbish to be thrown into the paper, plastic, or metallic waste. I did not understand the motive, but I just did as I was told to.
After the school holiday, I started studying in the new school. Since many students in my class did not know one another as well, and that we were also sharing the same speaking language, it was not hard for me to fit into the school. For the next seven years, it was the way of my life.
I returned to Singapore after seven years.
“Wow! The airport is so clean and advanced” I exclaimed. This was the first thing that strucked me as I stepped into the airport. I walked towards the exit and saw many people rushing in and out, all looking rushed. My family and I hailed a cab and started travelling back to our past estate. Along the trip back, my Mother explained how Singapore had changed all the while we left. Looking at the roads and buildings, even though I do not have a deep memory on them, they seemed very close to me. I long knew that Singapore was a green city and it certainly lived up to her name! I am very impressed by the environment of this country.
We went to a hawker centre near my flat. The smell of the food at the hawker centre was extremely pleasant. Even though I do not remember many times back then I was in Singapore, I certainly missed the food here! I ate a lot at the hawker centre.
After that, we went back to our home. Along the way, I saw many recycling bins, however, I realized that not many are full. Instead, much trash that are not to be recycled are left just beside the bins, or even thrown into the bin! As I moved along, suddenly, a flower pot fell down from the third storey and barely missed me! I expected a strong apology from the owner of the flower pot, however, what came was, “Look out! How can you walk so carelessly just below the flat! Do not cause trouble for me!”
“How can someone be so inconsiderate and unreasonable?” I did not have a great tolerance on such matters, hence, I rushed up and charged towards the unit. I pounded on the door. When the owner of the unit opened the door, I could not persist any further and demanded for the apology. But just as I have expected, the owner of the unit retaliated and refused to do so. We started to quarrel and just before it turned into a fight, I was stopped by my parents.
I reflected again and again, to realize that even though Singapore has many benefits, there are still many areas of improvements to be done. Singapore is extremely successful in building up its country, however, what about the citizens? I feel that the some citizens are extremely inconsiderate. About what I have seen around the recycling bins, I wonder, “Have the residents ever wondered what consequences this action may bring?” The plastic could be easily mixed with the glass, if the plastic is melted together with the glass to recycle, not only pollution will be caused, the glass quality will also be affected. What was worst is, citizens can be very unreasonable, such that they actually blame others for being careless when they cause the flower pot to nearly crash on others. Even though those are only the minority, but it had reflected badly on Singapore.
However, in comparison to Singapore, Taiwan is a less developed country. Many places are also very dirty. But in Taiwan, people seemed to be friendlier in comparison. About the three trash bins I have mentioned, is something that the government had imposed to aid the environment. The use of multiple trash bins is to separate trash made from different materials. Even though it was something compulsory, however, citizens in Singapore would rather take a risk of being fined than to depose their rubbish appropriately.
I feel that this short story is a good one with a little twist at the back. Kah Xuan explored the many ways in which Singapore is, and even compared it to Taiwan. I learned that everything has flaws, and we should accept life this way. The reader should love the way Singapore is, and not get frustrated over the flaws.
ReplyDeleteThis compo is a rather unique one. The writer goes abroad to live for seven years, then comes back and finds everything different, and mostly better. I feel that the identity of the story is not too clear. It could have been the rudeness or it could have been the litterbug issues, but neither of them has been described in great detail. However, the composition does show that Singaporeans have little regard for dustbins, much less recycle bins. We rely too much on the cleaners that clean the streets for us. If there was one week where all the cleaners took leave, Singaporeans will suffer indefinitely. I feel that this composition has brought across this point.
ReplyDeleteI feel that this composition is very unqiue and interesting. The writer went back to singpaore and found many thoings different from before, and many things different from taiwan. The points on how singapore is unique is very good, and this shows how things done by singaporeans affect the image of singapore. In ccontrast to chuan xin, I find the identity quite clear. However, I find that the story plan is not very clear. The climax was too short, and the compo does not have a clear story plan. I feel that the story is like a bit of argumentative, instead of narrative. In conclusion, this story is rather unique, but lacks enough story content.
ReplyDeleteThis story is quite interesting and I like it. And also, I was quite surprised but happy to see you mention Taiwan as we are not so significant like China or USA.
ReplyDeleteI would like to disagree with your point of Taiwan being "less-developed" than Singapore. We are actually same as Singapore in terms of development, and in fact, we were one of the Four Asian Tigers alongside Singapore! And also, Taipei 101 which completed construction in 2004, was considered as the tallest office building in the world! We are also in fact designing smartphones, laptops and other electronics. Heard of HTC?
Overall I think your story is well done. By the way, is it true that you really went to Taiwan? Was it nice there? If you did go to Taiwan, hope you like it. :)
Kah Xuan, what you've written here is "An 'And' Story." Meaning that your plot is: this happened and that happened and something else happened and yet another thing happend, with the result that it adds up to nothing at all. How does this relate to "Identity" or "Change"? Where's your plot? How has your protagonist changed because of what's happened in the story?
ReplyDeleteThe assignment was to write a narrative short story, not to write a comparison between Singapore and Taiwan thinly disguised as a summary recount. You need to think about who your character is and what his motivations and desires are, and then have the plot spring from this. Think about how alienated he would feel coming back to Singapore after being gone so long; and wouldn't he miss the friends he'd made in Taiwan?
You're going to need to do a major rewrite for your final draft, but there's enough here that you won't need to completely start from scratch. Just make sure you address the concerns made here, and show lots of specific sensory details.